We are giving the final touches to our app that replaces "while you where out memos" in offices. We are looking for beta users and comments on the design of the landing page. Any comments are appreciated.
that bright green banner is really bright... i found it hard to read any of the text on the site.
i'm also not convinced -- i see a crowded laptop screen and a bunch of post-it notes but i don't see a screenshot of my "favorite device", so i can't get a good 1-second gist of what you're offering.
nit picks:
- "while you were out memos" should be "while you were out" memos (move quotation mark)
- i would take the first person qualifiers out of the copy (we take the ..., our app..., etc) and make things shorter and more concise.
overall:
- design looks nice, though it looks to me like a pre-made theme
- show your apps in action, in an uncluttered environment (note how most macbook images don't show the keyboard)
I would improve the "Subscription Confirmed" email that comes after you sign up. It looks really bare, has First and Last name fields empty and does not match the websites style or color scheme.
i'm also not convinced -- i see a crowded laptop screen and a bunch of post-it notes but i don't see a screenshot of my "favorite device", so i can't get a good 1-second gist of what you're offering.
nit picks:
- "while you were out memos" should be "while you were out" memos (move quotation mark)
- i would take the first person qualifiers out of the copy (we take the ..., our app..., etc) and make things shorter and more concise.
overall:
- design looks nice, though it looks to me like a pre-made theme
- show your apps in action, in an uncluttered environment (note how most macbook images don't show the keyboard)
- strengthen and clarify your message